Elevator Pitch: Onemansgoal.com

Author: Jim Kukral Category: Elevator pitch

Tuesday
Apr 22, 2008

Got another elevator pitch from Onemansgoal.com, a blog in the making money online niche. What do you think of his pitch? Pretty good I though. I wish he would have said his name though? Isn’t that important?

Want to have your elevator pitch reviewed? Send me your video and I’ll post it here on my blog.

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Onemansgoal

April 22nd, 2008 at 1:15 pm

I wanted to say my name but didn't have time in the 15 seconds. When I started with my name it caused me to speak faster and it was harder to understand what i was saying. What would you recommend me taking out of the video to add my name (the video came in at a full 15 seconds)
Thanks you

Marc

TrishaLyn

April 30th, 2008 at 8:42 pm

You could try squeezing your name in when you say “posts by me, Marc ____, ” and then go on with the sentence. It might push it to 16-17 seconds but I'm not sure if the time is absolutely important to be dead on… Jim?

Jim

May 3rd, 2008 at 11:55 pm

That wasn't very good, not very noteworthy and I almost didn't remember a word you said writing this comment now. I'd like to see what Kukral thinks about this one, I'm giving the thumbs down, but a nice attempt!